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The Chart Below Shows Male Female-Fitness Membership Between 1970-2000

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The clustered time-series bar chart compares the numbers of men and women who belonged to a fitness center, every five years between 1970 and 2000. Overall, there were more men than women in four of the seven five-year intervals on the chart. At two of these data points, 1975 and 1995, the difference was particularly significant. Total membership was highest in 1995 and second highest in 1975. In particular, the variation in male memberships was much larger than for the women, ranging from a low of 1000 in 2000 to a high of 5000 in 1995. That is a spread of 4000. In contrast, there were two highs of about 2800 for women, 1985 and 1995, and a low value of 1000 in 1970, a difference of 1800. The gap between male and female memberships also showed a wide range. In 1990, it was the smallest, with just over 2000 from each group. The gap was largest in 1975, when there were twice as many men as women were in a fitness program. In terms of total membership, it was around 3000 in both 1970 and 2000, but higher at all intervals in between. The largest value was 7800 in 1995.
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who belonged to a fitness center, every five years between 1970 and 2000.

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in four of the seven five-year intervals on the chart. At two of these data points, 1975 and 1995, the difference was
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was highest in 1995 and second highest in 1975.

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was much larger than for the
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, ranging from a low of 1000 in 2000 to a high of 5000 in 1995.
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a spread of 4000.
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, 1985 and 1995, and a low value of 1000 in 1970, a difference of 1800. The gap between male and female
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a wide range. In 1990, it was the smallest, with
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over 2000 from each group. The gap was largest in 1975, when there were twice as
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were in a fitness program. In terms of total
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, it was around 3000 in both 1970 and 2000,
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higher at all intervals in between. The largest value was 7800 in 1995.
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