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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs 7JrA2
The bar chart illustrates the number of students pursuing higher studies percentage wise in four countries in the years of 2000, 2005 and 2010. Overall, Intakes had grown in Country A, C and D though Country A showed a relatively steady growth throughout the years while admissions plunged in Country B in same period. Each country had a particular trend in the numbers of higher education intakes. On the contemplating bar data for each nation separately several statements can be conferred. Country A, 38 % of young population opted higher studies in 2000 which raised to 52 and later 62 percent in 2005 and 2010 respectively likewise Country C and D followed similar fashion except Country C’s enrolled students remained same on 52 percent in both later years of 2005 and 2010 after getting a tiny rise in comparison with the students in 2000, whereas, Country D had the highest percentage of students involved in higher learning in all the three years although there was not as much spike in 2010 compared with 2005. Meanwhile, country B had fluctuating style in bars, first digits of disciples dropped to 41% in 2005 and in 2010, it managed to gain 43%, however, yet couldn’t reach to 2000s mark.
The bar chart illustrates the number of
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students
pursuing higher studies percentage wise in four
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countries
in the years of 2000, 2005 and 2010.

Overall
, Intakes had grown in
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Country
A, C and D though
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Country
A
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showed
a
relatively
steady growth throughout the years while admissions plunged in
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Country
B in same period.

Each
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country
had a particular trend in the numbers of higher education intakes. On the contemplating bar data for each nation
separately
several statements can
be conferred
.
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Country
A, 38 % of young population opted higher studies in 2000 which raised to 52 and later 62 percent in 2005 and 2010
respectively
likewise
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Country
C and D followed similar fashion except
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Country
C’s enrolled
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students
remained same on 52 percent in both later years of 2005 and 2010 after getting a tiny rise
in comparison
with the
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students
in 2000, whereas,
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Country
D had the highest percentage of
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students
involved in higher learning in all the three years although there was not as much spike in 2010 compared with 2005. Meanwhile,
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country
B had fluctuating style in bars,
first
digits of disciples dropped to 41% in 2005 and in 2010, it managed to gain 43%,
however
,
yet
couldn’t reach to 2000s mark.
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IELTS academic Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
206 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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