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The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go live in other countries

The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go live in other countries LVR1
The chart shows the difficulties people have when they move to another country and how the issues vary based on people’s ages. Overall, health care issue is the most important factor that people all of ages have when they are trying to leave abroad. As you can see from the chart, healthcare is the most serious issue for people in their forties and fifties. Around 37 percent of people in this age group is affected by this issue and followed by people over the age of 55. On other hand, only 33 percent of 18-to 34-year old find it difficult to resolve their healthcare issue. Despite the fact that, only around 20% of people in the middle age group have difficulty finding schools, which is a minor issue compared to the others. Furthermore, only less than 5 percent of people over 55 find it difficult to arrange a school for their children. In general, all age groups face similar problems to some extent, but the percentage of middle-ages people who struggle finding health care is relatively higher than the other.
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from the chart, healthcare is the most serious
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for
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in their forties and fifties. Around 37 percent of
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find it difficult to resolve their healthcare issue.

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