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entertainment bar chart in asia, europe and united states from 1995 to 2000

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The bar chart indicates the spend of money from 1995 and 2000 in various leisure activity. From an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the United States has the highest amount of money to spend while Asia is the opposite. Publishing is the most favourite entertainment and continually increase over the years. On the second place, television with slightly less enthusiats also increasing. Cinema, on the other hand, has always been the least activity to chose. Comparing the chart from 1995 and 2000, it is clear that people are more and more attracted to entertainment. There are huge increase in all three regions. The graph is dramatically increase in almost all kind of amusement. This indicates the high rate of spending in Asia, Europe and United States.

The bar chart indicates the spend of money Nonstandard phrase. Did you mean: "from 1995 to 2000"?from 1995 to 2000
from 1995 and 2000
 in various leisure activity. From an overall
 perspective, it is readily
 apparent that the United States has the highest amount of money to spend while Asia is the opposite.

Publishing is the most Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.favorite
favourite
 entertainment and continually
 increase over the years. On the second place, television with slightly
 less Possible spelling mistake found.enthusiastsenthusiast
enthusiats
also
 increasing. Cinema, on the other hand
, has always been the least activity Did you mean "to choose"?to choose
to chose
.

Comparing the chart Nonstandard phrase. Did you mean: "from 1995 to 2000"?from 1995 to 2000
from 1995 and 2000
, it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 are more and more attracted to entertainment. There are huge increase in all three regions. The graph is dramatically
Consider using a past participle here: "increased".increased
increase
 in almost all kind of amusement. This indicates the high rate of spending in Asia, Europe and United States. 

IELTS academic entertainment bar chart in asia, europe and united states from 1995 to 2000

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