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The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA.

This chart shows that having heart attacks by gender and age group. It can be seen that while men have suffered more than women, people between 29-44 ages don’t have heart attacks. Men between 45-64 ages have heart attacks sharply increase that it seems that the results of heart attacks in 29-44 ages have rose treble. Generally, the results of heart attacks in men of all ages are higher than in women. While women in 29-44 ages have never suffered heart attacks, men in the same age have had heart attacks slightly higher. According to this chart, we can see that men and women over 65 ages have sharply increased.
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