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The diagram shows how rainwater is used to supply drinking water in Australian city.

The diagram shows how people used rainwater to supply drinking water in Australian city. Overall, this process is consist of 3main stages, which are collecting water, water treatment and water supply for households. In the first stage, when it rains, the process commences, so, people collect water using the drains under the houses, then water flaws down though the tubes reaches to the main tube which is a bit bigger. Afterwards, water goes down to water filter. In the following stage, water goes through the thin tube, then collects in the storage. Moreover, water goes through another tube and reaches to other storage for water treatment with chemicals. Finally, clean water goes up through the tubes to the houses to supply drinking water for people.
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rainwater to supply drinking
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in Australian city.
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,
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treatment and
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supply for households.

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collect
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using the drains under the
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, then
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flaws down though the
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reaches to the main
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which is a bit bigger. Afterwards,
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goes down to
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filter. In the following stage,
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goes through the thin
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, then collects in the storage.
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,
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goes through another
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and reaches to other storage for
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treatment with chemicals.
Finally
, clean
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goes up through the
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to the
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to supply drinking
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IELTS academic The diagram shows how rainwater is used to supply drinking water in Australian city.

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  American English
2 paragraphs
125 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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