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The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA.

The chart shows the heart attack results of people in the USA, according to gender for three age groups in thousands of people. At first glance, we can easily find out that heart attacks happen much more in late adulthood for both males and females. On the other hand, specifically, in total, men have dramatically more heart attacks than women at every age. Conversely, according to the age between 29-44 yrs, women don’t get heart attack almost at all. In contrast, around 123, 000 men catch a heart attack for this age group. The same trend continues with the most evident difference with 300, 000 after 45 up to 64. Meanwhile, If we look at the people older than 65 yrs, the divergence appears small. While approximately 440, 000 figures, men come close in comparison with near 374, 000 figures for women. In conclusion, men generally have much more life risk than women by about 50% more overall.
The chart
shows
the
heart
attack
results of
people
in the USA, according to gender for three age groups in thousands of
people
. At
first
glance, we can
easily
find out that
heart
attacks
happen much more in late adulthood for both males and females.
On the other hand
,
specifically
, in total,
men
have
dramatically
more
heart
attacks
than
women
at every age.

Conversely
, according to the age between 29-44 yrs,
women
don’t
get
heart
attack
almost at all.
In contrast
, around 123, 000
men
catch a
heart
attack
for this age group. The same trend continues with the most evident difference with 300, 000 after 45 up to 64.

Meanwhile, If we look at the
people
older than 65 yrs, the divergence appears
small
. While approximately 440, 000 figures,
men
come
close
in comparison
with near 374, 000 figures for
women
.
In conclusion
,
men
generally
have much more life
risk
than
women
by about 50% more
overall
.
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