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The chart below shows employment figures (in thousands) for different tourism-related industries in 1989 and 1999.

The chart below shows employment figures (in thousands) for different tourism-related industries in 1989 and 1999. LbqDG
The bar chart describes people who were employed in 5 different kinds of categories related to tourism in 1989 and 1999. Overall, it can be seen that the number of employees working in 1999 was higher than that of people were employed in 1988 and the figures for workers in the culture, food, and hotels(and other accommodation) occupied the majority of the total employees. The number of employees in the culture and food sectors was around 284, 000 people in 1989, which was lower than that of the following ten years. Following that, the figure for people working in the travel accounted for 114, 200 people, exceeded that of in 1989, which was two times as many as the figures. In contrast, 306, 000 workers in the hotels sector were reported in 1999, which was slightly higher than that of hotels employees in 1989. Meanwhile, the figure for people working in sports was chosen to be the least, lower than the figure for 10 years ago.
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for workers in the culture, food, and hotels(and other accommodation) occupied the majority of the total employees.

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in 1989, which was lower than that of the following ten years. Following that, the
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working in the travel accounted for 114, 200
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, exceeded that of in 1989, which was two times as
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for 10 years ago.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows employment figures (in thousands) for different tourism-related industries in 1989 and 1999.

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