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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015 56WaQ
In the mid of the 20th century women start taking a senior management positions in companies. We can see from this table the percentage of women who took senior management position. The leading company was Finsbury LTD with 16% of their higher managements were women and followed by Bamforth and Eldan LTD with 3% and 9% respectively. However, these numbers kept almost the same percentages up to 1985 for Finsbury and Bamforth. On the other hand, Eldan Ltd tripled their percentages with 14%. In the 90th and at the beginning of the 21th century, the situation have not change a lot also for Finsbury and Bamforth. Their numbers kept rising but in steady pace with 2 and 7 % respectively. However, 15 years later we can see a huge increase of number for women in management positions. Companies like Eldan and Bamforth doubled their numbers with 64 and 46% respectively.
In the mid of the 20th century
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companies
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from this table the percentage of
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women
who took senior
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position. The leading
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Finsbury
LTD with 16% of their higher
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managements
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and followed by
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Bamforth
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Eldan
LTD with 3% and 9%
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.
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, these
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numbers
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almost the same percentages up to 1985 for
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Finsbury
and
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Bamforth
.
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,
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Eldan
Ltd tripled their percentages with 14%. In the 90th and at the beginning of the
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21th
century, the situation have not
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Finsbury
and
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Bamforth
.

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in steady pace with 2 and 7 %
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.
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, 15 years later we can
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Eldan
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doubled their
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with 64 and 46%
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IELTS academic The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015

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