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the chart show the changes in household

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The given line graphs illustrate the data on the changes of household electrical appliances in love 99 years (1920-2019)and the number of hours household spent per week in one country. Overall, the different household activities have shown as percentages of housework such as using washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner. At the beginning of the year in 1920 the highest percentage took by using the washing machine while refrigerator has 0%, but it has shown an upward movement and it reached 100% in 1980 from that year onward it showed static line. On the other hand, the vacuum clear using has shown 30%in 1920, however in the year 2000, the percentage depicts as 100%. As well, in the 1920household spent 50hours per week of house works, but the line shows downward movement from 50 hours to 10 hours per week. The deduction has represented by 40 hours.
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line graphs illustrate the data on the
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changes
of
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electrical appliances in
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love
99 years (1920-2019)and the number of
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hours
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household
spent per week in one country.
Overall
, the
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different
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household
activities have shown as percentages of housework such as using washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner. At the beginning of the
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year
in 1920 the highest percentage took by using the washing machine while refrigerator has 0%,
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but
it has shown an upward movement and it reached 100% in 1980 from that
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year
onward it
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showed
static line.
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, the vacuum
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clear
using has shown 30%in 1920,
however
in the
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year
2000, the percentage depicts as 100%.
As well
, in the
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1920household
spent
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50hours
per week of
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house
works,
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but
the line
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shows
downward movement from 50
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hours
to 10
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hours
per week. The deduction has represented by 40
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IELTS academic the chart show the changes in household

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  American English
1 paragraphs
147 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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