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The bar chart illustrates the sector contributions and makes us to see the differences between the sectors for 40 years. In this case, each sector has shown by various colors. First, the sector of agriculture can be the one which mentions first. The most dramatic thing we can focus on is the decreasing more by the time. For instance, between 1960-1970 the gap is approximately 10 but between 1980-1990 it is more than 10. On another hand, the other sector that is industry increases by the time, , but this increasing seems to be disappeared between 1990-2000. However, the other data we can take from this chart is the industry has the least contribution except 2000. In this year, it is 2000, the least contribution comes from agriculture. Lastly, the sector we had not mentioned yet is services. It seems to be the most increased sector in time. It has different amount of increasing and specifically, between 1980-1990 and 1990-2000 has extreme increasing. This sector has wide spreading parts in the chart. Consequently, all the sectors have different tend and this is the reason of the varioution.
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see
the differences between the
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for 40 years.
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, each
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sector
has shown by various colors.

First
, the
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sector
of agriculture can be the one which mentions
first
. The most dramatic thing we can focus on is the decreasing more by the time.
For instance
, between 1960-1970 the gap is approximately 10
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between 1980-1990 it is more than 10.

On another hand, the other
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that is
industry increases by the time,
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this increasing seems to
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between 1990-2000.
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comes
from agriculture.

Lastly
, the
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we had not mentioned
yet
is services. It seems to be the most increased
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sector
in time. It has
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different
amount of increasing and
specifically
, between 1980-1990 and 1990-2000 has extreme increasing. This
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sector
has wide spreading parts in the chart.

Consequently
, all the
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have
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different
tend and this is the reason of the
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IELTS academic sector contribution to India

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