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The group below shows average carbon dioxide(CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. v.2

The group below shows average carbon dioxide(CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. v. 2
The given bar chart gives information about typical carbon dioxide (CO2) emission individually in four European countries in the years 1967 and 2007. In general, it can be seen that the UK and Sweden have the downward trends regarding CO2 emission in metric tonnes, while Italy and Portugal show upward trends for it given the period. The most remarkable feature was that CO2 emission in Britain accounted for the highest amount throughout the year from 11 tonnes at the beginning of the period to about 9 tonnes in 2017 despite a constant decrease tendency. On the other hand, Sweden emitted the second largest amount of CO2 emissions with nearly 9 tonnes in 1967 and a decade, its figure reached the roughly similar amount of that of UK' s. However, since then, CO2 emissions had decreased dramatically to almost 5. 8 tonnes in the end. In contrast, there were opposite patterns from the data given above in remained two countries. Italy and Portugal started at approximately 4. 1 tonnes and around 1. 8 tonnes respectively. In Italy, its value continued to soar to almost 6. 7 tonnes and in 1988, exceeding the data of Sweden, and since 1997, it had remained stable with roughly 7. 8 tonnes. In Portugal, discharging CO2 emission per person also rose to 4. 8 tonnes in 1997, and since then, its figure had had a plateau. Overall, although the UK' s CO2 emissions had dropped consistently, British people released the most CO2 emissions over the given period.
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bar chart gives information about typical carbon dioxide (CO2)
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emission
individually
in four European countries in the years 1967 and 2007.

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, it can be
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seen
that the UK and Sweden have the downward trends regarding CO2
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emission
in metric tonnes, while Italy and Portugal
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show
upward trends for it
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given
the period.

The most remarkable feature was that CO2
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emission
in Britain accounted for the highest amount throughout the year from 11 tonnes at the beginning of the period to about 9 tonnes in 2017 despite a constant decrease tendency.
On the other hand
, Sweden emitted the second largest amount of CO2
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emissions
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9 tonnes in 1967 and a decade, its figure reached the roughly similar amount of that of
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However
, since then, CO2
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emissions
had decreased
dramatically
to almost 5. 8 tonnes in the
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end
.

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, there were opposite patterns from the data
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given
above in remained two countries. Italy and Portugal
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started
at approximately 4. 1 tonnes and around 1. 8 tonnes
respectively
. In Italy, its value continued to soar to almost 6. 7 tonnes and in 1988, exceeding the data of Sweden, and since 1997, it had remained stable with roughly 7. 8 tonnes. In Portugal, discharging CO2
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emission
per person
also
rose to 4. 8 tonnes in 1997, and since then, its figure had had a plateau.

Overall
, although the
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emissions
had dropped
consistently
, British
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people
released the most CO2
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emissions
over the
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given
period.
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IELTS academic The group below shows average carbon dioxide(CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. v. 2

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