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The chart below gives information about favorite leisure activity of teenagers in Canada.

The chart below gives information about favorite leisure activity of teenagers in Canada. m831K
The bar graph elucidates the information regarding the 4 various leisure activities of Canadian teenagers. It is therefore, lucid from the overall analysis that identical proportion of boys and girls prefer to listen music in their leisure time. However, maximum of male teenagers like to do shopping. As being depicted in the illustration, almost 13% of teenagers girls liked to spend their leisure time in sports. Whereas, the figure for boys was twice of it for the same. Apart from this, computer games were played both males and females teenagers in their leisure time activity the figure accounted for almost 18% and 14% respectively. Probing further, the highest percentage of teenaged boys accounting for approximately 33% loved to do shopping in their free time. In contrast shopping was least favorite leisure activity among Canadian girls. While, music was equally liked by both teenager girls and boys in their leisure time the figure accounted for almost 19%.
The bar graph elucidates the information regarding the 4 various
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leisure
activities of Canadian
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teenagers
. It is
therefore
, lucid from the
overall
analysis that identical proportion of
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boys
and
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girls
prefer to listen music in their
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leisure
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time
.
However
, maximum of male
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teenagers
like to
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do shopping
. As
being depicted
in the illustration, almost 13% of
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teenagers
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girls
liked to spend their
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leisure
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time
in sports. Whereas, the figure for
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boys
was twice of it for the same. Apart from this, computer games
were played
both males and females
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teenagers
in their
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leisure
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time
activity the figure accounted for almost 18% and 14%
respectively
. Probing
further
, the highest percentage of
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teenaged
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boys
accounting for approximately 33%
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loved
to
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do shopping
in their free
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time
. In
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contrast
shopping was least favorite
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leisure
activity among Canadian
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girls
. While, music was
equally
liked by both
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teenager
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girls
and
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boys
in their
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leisure
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time
the figure accounted for almost 19%.
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