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The chart below give information about the places preferred for exercise by different groups in Australia.

The chart below give information about the places preferred for exercise by different groups in Australia. 2r1NX
The pie chart compares the preference of places for workouts in Australia by distinct age groups. The data is provided in percentage. Overall, it can be elucidated that a significant percent of female opt to exercise in park as well as gym; whereas, males tend to prefer gym more than park. Firstly, senior people of age above 45, an overwhelming percent of people around 70 % opt for park while only 30% people choose to go to gym for workout. Secondly, about 60% of individuals of age group between 35-44 and 25-34 prefer park for exercise rather than gym which is only choose by merely about 40% people. Moreover, 50% of young individuals, age group between 16 to 24 share similar interest for exercising in gym and park. Furthermore, a substantial percentage of females about 70% tend to visit more to park for maintaining fitness instead of visiting gym which is only opted by 60%. However, a considerable male individuals that is 60% prefer to exercise at gym. Last but not least, just about 35 percent of male choose to go to park for workout.
The pie chart compares the preference of places for workouts in Australia by distinct
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groups. The data
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that a significant percent of female opt to exercise in
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park
as well
as
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gym
; whereas, males tend to prefer
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more than park.

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, senior
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above 45, an overwhelming percent of
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around 70 % opt for
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park
while
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only
30%
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people
choose to go to
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gym
for workout.
Secondly
, about 60% of individuals of
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group between 35-44 and 25-34 prefer
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park
for exercise
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about 40%
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share similar interest for exercising in
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and park.

Furthermore
, a substantial percentage of females about 70% tend to visit more to
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park
for maintaining fitness
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gym
which is
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opted by 60%.
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60% prefer to exercise at
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. Last
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about 35 percent of male choose to go to
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for workout.
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