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the changes of an office building between the present and the future. do you agree with this statement

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The maps illustrates the took the place of an office building between the present and the future. Overall, there are disappeared of areas of grass on west and east. Office areas will be expanded in the future. As clearly seen that storeroom on North is unchanged. Kitchen, canteen next that are took the place by office. The entrance which lay on west is stable. 4 offices building on south is added become 2 big office building. There are divided a half by main entrance which lay on mid. We can see that the area of grass on west will be changed the outdoor seating area on the rich of entrance and chairs opposite that. The area of grass on the earth will be took the place by coffee machine and meeting area. The WCs room which seat next storeroom will be changed next coffee machine. Meeting arence will be contained chairs for people in the future.
The maps
You should probably use "illustrate".
illustrates
the took the place of an
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office
building between the present and the future.

Overall
, there
are disappeared
of
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areas
of grass on west and east.
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Office
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areas
will
be expanded
in the future.

“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
clearly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that storeroom on North
is unchanged
. Kitchen, canteen
next
that are
Consider using a past participle here: "taken".
took
the place by
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office
. The entrance which lay on west is stable. 4
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offices
building on south is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
become 2
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big
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office
building. There
are divided
a half by main entrance which lay on mid.

We can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
that the
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area
of grass on west will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
the outdoor seating
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area
on the rich of entrance and chairs opposite that. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
of grass on the earth will be
Consider using a past participle here: "taken".
took
the place by coffee machine and meeting
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area
. The
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WCs
room which seat
next
storeroom will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
next
coffee machine. Meeting
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arence
will
be contained
chairs for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in the future.
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IELTS academic the changes of an office building between the present and the future.

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4 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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