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The beachfront of austrailia

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In 1950, the less developed area contained a road above the beach ending at a car park. Today, the road and car park still exist though both the size of the car park and the length of the road have been extended. The present road leads to a lighthouse (present in 1950 as well) and a newly erected surf club by the side of the beach. A small 25m pool remains in the general vicinity of the lighthouse. Beneath the road in 1950, there was a playground, an area for dining tables and a pavilion, which are largely unchanged in the present day with the exception of the children’s playground being replaced by an additional car park. Closer to the beach, a 25m pool has been enlarged to 50 meters and there is currently a restaurant and another surf club to the left of the beach.
In 1950, the less developed area contained a
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above the
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beach
ending at a
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car
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park
.
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road
and
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car
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park
still
exist though both the size of the
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car
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park
and the length of the
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road
have
been extended
. The present
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road
leads to a lighthouse (present in 1950
as well
) and a
newly
erected surf club by the side of the
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beach
. A
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small
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25m
pool remains in the general vicinity of the lighthouse.

Beneath the
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road
in 1950, there was a playground, an area for dining tables and a pavilion, which are
largely
unchanged in the present day
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with the exception of
the children’s playground
being replaced
by an additional
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car
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park
. Closer to the
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beach
, a
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25m
pool has
been enlarged
to 50 meters and there is
currently
a restaurant and another surf club to the
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left
of the
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IELTS academic The beachfront of austrailia

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2 paragraphs
146 words
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