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The bar graphs are representing the total number of marriages and divorces in eight varying countries throughout the period of 1981 and 1994.

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The bar graphs are representing the total number of marriages and divorces in eight varying countries throughout the period of 1981 and 1994. The surveyed nations include the USA, Japan, UK, Germany, Finland, Denmark, Italy and France. As it can be clearly seen in the chart, the rate of marriages in all of the nations, excluding Denmark, had a sharp decline over the period of survey. However, there seems to be a rise in total divorce cases. The bar chart represents that the marriage rate in 1981 in the US was the highest in comparison to other nations, which was exceeding 10 per thousand. On the contrary, in 1994, this number declined to 9 per thousand people. In other European nations, including Italy, Denmark, Finland, France and the United Kingdom, the marriage rate was approximately 6 for every thousand people. In 1981, standing at 5 per thousand, Denmark recorded the lowest number of marriages. The graph also shows that post 15 years, the marriage rate fell further in most of the countries. However, in Denmark, the number saw an increase, which was nearly 2 per thousand. In 1981, Germany and Finland recorded almost the same rate, a little more than 6 per thousand. Still, a significant drop was recorded in both these nations. In Finland, the marriage rate declined to a little more than 4 per thousand in 1994 and it was closer to 6 in Germany during the same time. Also, from the divorce statistics, it is clear that the maximum rate of divorce was seen in the USA, which was a bit over 5 per thousand in 1981. The divorce rate of 1994 was compared to the marriage rate of 1981 in all of the countries, including Denmark and the USA. The lowest number of divorce rate was registered in Italy among others. Germany showed stability for 2 years. And then, the divorce rate per thousand increased a bit from less than 3 per thousand in 1981 to more than 3 in 1994.
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in eight varying countries throughout the period of 1981 and 1994. The surveyed
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nations
include the USA, Japan, UK, Germany, Finland, Denmark, Italy and France. As it can be
clearly
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seen
in the chart, the
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rate
of
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marriages
in
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all of the
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nations
, excluding Denmark, had a sharp decline over the period of survey.
However
, there seems to be a rise in total
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divorce
cases.

The bar chart represents that the
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marriage
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rate
in 1981 in the US was the highest
in comparison
to other
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nations
, which was exceeding 10 per thousand.
On the contrary
, in 1994, this
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number
declined to 9 per thousand
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people
. In other European
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nations
, including Italy, Denmark, Finland, France and the United Kingdom, the
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marriage
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rate
was approximately 6 for every thousand
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people
. In 1981, standing at 5 per thousand, Denmark recorded the lowest
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number
of
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marriages
. The graph
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that post 15 years, the
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marriage
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rate
fell
further
in most of the countries.
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, in Denmark, the
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number
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an increase, which was
nearly
2 per thousand.

In 1981, Germany and Finland recorded almost the same
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, a
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more than 6 per thousand.
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, a significant drop
was recorded
in both these
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nations
. In Finland, the
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marriage
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declined to a
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more than 4 per thousand in 1994 and it was closer to 6 in Germany during the same time.

Also
, from the
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statistics, it is
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that the maximum
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rate
of
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was
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seen
in the USA, which was a bit over 5 per thousand in 1981. The
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divorce
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rate
of 1994
was compared
to the
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marriage
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of 1981 in
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all of the
countries, including Denmark and the USA. The lowest
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of
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divorce
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was registered
in Italy among others. Germany
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showed
stability for 2 years. And then, the
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divorce
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rate
per thousand increased a bit from less than 3 per thousand in 1981 to more than 3 in 1994.
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IELTS academic The bar graphs are representing the total number of marriages and divorces in eight varying countries throughout the period of 1981 and 1994.

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