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The rendered table illustrates the proportion of youngsters who was working in seven different places in one nation in 2005 and 2010

The rendered table illustrates the proportion of youngsters who was working in seven different places in one nation in 2005 and 2010 DYRQj
In initial, year 2005 was concerned, the figure of people stood at 5% in the agriculture and transport. Figure went through the roof in the business and manufacturing by 7% and 21%. social services ranked first and shops restaurants & hotels ranked third, and there respective figure was recorded at 34% and 20%. In other, it was reparted to be 8%. Turning to 2010, the highest percentage in shop restaurants & hotels, and, the second highest on social services(32% and 22%), respectively. the proportion of business was 2% more than agriculture, amounting to 10%. The difference was 4% between manufacturing and other. Minimum employees were witnessed in transport. It was 4%. It is clear that more preference was given to shop restaurants & hotels and social services, people showed less interest to other workplaces
In initial, year 2005
was concerned
, the figure of
people
stood at 5% in the agriculture and transport. Figure went through the roof in the business and manufacturing by 7% and 21%.
social
services ranked
first
and shops restaurants & hotels ranked third, and there respective figure
was recorded
at 34% and 20%. In other, it was
reparted
to be 8%.

Turning to 2010, the highest percentage in shop restaurants & hotels, and, the second highest on social services(32% and 22%),
respectively
.
the
proportion of business was 2% more than agriculture, amounting to 10%. The difference was 4% between manufacturing and other. Minimum employees
were witnessed
in transport. It was 4%. It is
clear
that more preference was
given
to shop restaurants & hotels and social services,
people
showed
less interest to other
workplaces
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IELTS academic The rendered table illustrates the proportion of youngsters who was working in seven different places in one nation in 2005 and 2010

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