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 The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

The bar graph compares the worldwide turnover for four kinds of electronic games for a period of seven years, starting from 2000 to 2006. Overall, it can be observed that sales for most of the digital games experienced an upward trend, except for console games. Handheld games had by far the highest number of sales throughout this period. In 2000, the sales figure for handheld games was close to 10 billion dollars, this figure rose gradually to reach its peak at slightly under 18 billion dollars. In contrast, at 6 billion dollars sales figure, console games were the second most popular games in year 2000. Between 2000 and 2006, this figure continued to drop to hit its lowest point of less than 3 billion dollars. Global sales for online games and mobile phone games followed a similar pattern with both sales numbers went up considerably for the first 6 years. By the seventh year, sales revenues for both types of games were over 6 billion dollars.
The bar graph compares the worldwide turnover for four kinds of electronic
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for a period of seven years, starting from 2000 to 2006.
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be observed
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sales
for most of the digital
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games
experienced an upward trend,
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except for
console
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. Handheld
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had by far the highest number of
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sales
throughout this period.

In 2000, the
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for handheld
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was close to 10
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billion
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, this
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rose
gradually
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under 18
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, at 6
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, console
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were the second most popular
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games
in
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2000. Between 2000 and 2006, this
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continued to drop to hit its lowest point of less than 3
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Global
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for online
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and mobile phone
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games
followed a similar pattern with both
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numbers went up
considerably
for the
first
6 years. By the seventh
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,
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revenues for both types of
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were over 6
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billion
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IELTS academic The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

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