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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » Write at least 150 words. Computer ownership by population between 2002 & 2010 Computer ownership by education, 2002 and 2010

The rendered coloumn plot illustrates the proportion of population in period of 8 years and education level in the two different years about computer ownership. As presented in the glance, level of population was upsurging in that time period. In2002, around 55% masses are the owner of computer. Followed by, from to 2008 the population of computer was ranging between 60% to 70%. Afterwards, 80% individuals were the owners in the end of year 2010. Further scrutining the chart, in 2002, 15% peoples with no high school diploma were the owners. Futhermore, high school graduates, incomplete college and bachelor's degree revealed the proportion of 35%, 60% and 70% respectively. In addition, 75% post graduate qualified persons were the computer owners. At last, in 2010, the percentage of computer owners of all kinds of students was upsurging in the year 2010. But, college incomplete masses shows the higher growth of 20% in 2010. To recapitulate, after elaborating the chart, population level of computer owners was increased in span of 8 years, and level of education was also shot up in that time.
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plot illustrates the proportion of
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population
in period of 8 years and education
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level
in the two
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different
years about computer ownership. As presented in the glance,
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level
of
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population
was upsurging in that time period. In2002, around 55% masses are the
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owner
of computer. Followed by, from to 2008 the
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population
of computer was ranging between 60% to 70%. Afterwards, 80% individuals were the
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owners
in the
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end
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2010.
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scrutining
the chart, in 2002, 15% peoples with no high school diploma were the
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owners
.
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, incomplete college and bachelor's degree revealed the proportion of 35%, 60% and 70%
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, 75% post graduate qualified persons were the computer
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owners
. At last, in 2010, the percentage of computer
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owners
of all kinds of students was upsurging in the
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year
2010.
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But
, college incomplete masses
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shows
the higher growth of 20% in 2010. To recapitulate, after elaborating the chart,
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population
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level
of computer
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owners
was increased
in span of 8 years, and
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level
of education was
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shot up in that time.
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IELTS academic The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

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