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The bar graph shows the earnings of different products in year 2015-16

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The graph illustrates the export income of five products (petroleum, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural and textiles) between 2015 and 16. Data is calibrated in terms of billion dollars. Overall, earnings through petroleum products was highest; whereas, income from textiles experienced least percentage. The most significant difference of earning was in agricultural products, it was most identical but not similar. Having a myopic look on bar graph, it is interesting to note that in the second year wealth made from engineered goods was above 16 billion dollars as opposed to the 2015 was around 58 billion dollars. The petroleum products earning was over doubled from agricultural products was( $ 30 billions and approximately 60 billion dollars correspondingly. ) Furthermore, the proportion of gems and jewellery was under 50 billion dollars in both years. The earning through the remaining products was lower nearly 25 billion dollars in comparison to the agricultural goods, and in 2016 the earning through textiles was just above 30 billion dollars.
The graph illustrates the export income of five
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(petroleum, engineered
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goods
, gems and
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,
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agricultural
and textiles) between 2015 and 16. Data
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in terms of
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billion
dollars.

Overall
,
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earnings
through petroleum
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products
was highest; whereas, income from textiles experienced least percentage. The most significant difference of
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earning
was in
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agricultural
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products
, it was most identical
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but
not similar.

Having a myopic look on bar graph, it is interesting to note that in the second year wealth made from engineered
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was above 16
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billion
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as opposed to the 2015 was around 58
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billion
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. The petroleum
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products
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earning
was over doubled from
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agricultural
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products
was
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$ 30
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and approximately 60
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billion
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correspondingly
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was under 50
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billion
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in both years. The
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earning
through the remaining
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was lower
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25
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in comparison
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agricultural
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goods
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through textiles was
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