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The bar graph shows the consumption of tea and coffee in seven countries in 2015

The bar graph shows the consumption of tea and coffee in seven countries in 2015 JoGM5
The bar graph delineates information regarding tea and coffee which were utilised in diverse seven nations during the 2015. The data has been measured in kilograms per person. Overall, it can be evidently seen that in most of countries, the ingestion of coffee was higher than tea; however, both consumption of tea and coffee remained constant in the United Kingdom. Looking at details, it is vivid that although Canada had experienced a maximum utilization of coffee which was accounted for just over 6kiograms per person, the least consumption of tea in Canada was below 1kilograms per person. United States had followed to Canada in intaking of coffee to below 6kilogram per person, whereas they less preffed to coffee. United Kingdom had exhibited a identical amount of both tea and coffee. Probing further, approximately 4 kilograms per person tea and just above 1kilogrsms per person coffee were drunk by individuals from Turkey. Australian intook coffee, that was more than utilization of tea. The former was 1kilograms per person. The amount of tea and coffee in Russia was Just over 2kilograms per person coffee and almost 1. 5 kilograms respectively.
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utilised
in diverse seven nations during the 2015. The data has
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person
.
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most of countries
, the ingestion of
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coffee
was higher than
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;
however
, both consumption of
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and
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coffee
remained constant in the United Kingdom. Looking at
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details
, it is vivid that although Canada had experienced a maximum utilization of
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just
over 6kiograms per
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, the least consumption of
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in Canada was below 1kilograms per
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person
. United States had followed to Canada in
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of
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to below 6kilogram per
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person
, whereas they less
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preffed
to
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coffee
. United Kingdom had exhibited
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identical amount of both
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. Probing
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, approximately 4 kilograms per
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person
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above 1kilogrsms per
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were drunk
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intook
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, that was more than utilization of
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. The former was 1kilograms per
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. The amount of
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in Russia was
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over 2kilograms per
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and almost 1. 5 kilograms
respectively
.
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