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The bar graph represents the ten countries that Australians visited most in the years 2000/2001 and 2010/2011 by percentage.

The bar graph represents the ten countries that Australians visited most in the years 2000/2001 and 2010/2011 by percentage. kgbXR
The bar graph represents the ten countries that Australians visited most in the years 2000/2001 and 2010/2011 by percentage. Overall, the data indicates that New Zealand attracts the largest amount of Australian tourists in both the two periods, accounted for 16%. On the other hand, Fiji has the lowest percentage of tourists in 2000/2001 with 2%. In 2010/2011, Malaysia and Hong Kong were the two least attracted places to Australian tourists of the ten countries, at about 3%. Out of the ten destinations, the percentage of New Zealand was much higher than the others. In 2000/2001, the percentage of travelers came to Indonesia and the UK were the same, at 9%. The proportion visiting the US, Singapore and Malaysia all dropped slightly, while the percentage of visitors came to New Zealand, the UK and Hong Kong fell rapidly in 2010/2011. Indonesia, Thailand, China and Fiji respectively had the smaller amount of visitors. The four countries all rose significantly in 2010/2011.
The bar graph represents the ten countries that Australians visited most in the years 2000/2001 and 2010/2011 by percentage.

Overall
, the data indicates that New Zealand attracts the largest amount of Australian tourists in both the two periods, accounted for 16%.
On the other hand
, Fiji has the lowest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of tourists in 2000/2001 with 2%. In 2010/2011, Malaysia and Hong Kong were the two least attracted places to Australian tourists of the ten countries, at about 3%.

Out of the ten destinations, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of New Zealand was much higher than the others. In 2000/2001, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of travelers came to Indonesia and the UK were the same, at 9%. The proportion visiting the US, Singapore and Malaysia all dropped
slightly
, while the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of visitors came to New Zealand, the UK and Hong Kong fell
rapidly
in 2010/2011. Indonesia, Thailand, China and Fiji
respectively
had the smaller amount of visitors. The four countries all rose
significantly
in 2010/2011.
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