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The chart below shows the number of computers sold at three computer stores in Ho Chi Minh City between 2000 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of computers sold at three computer stores in Ho Chi Minh City between 2000 and 2005. Q5wBb
The line graph illustrates how many computers were sold from 2000 to 2005 at three computer shops located in Ho Chi Minh City. Overall, the figure at The Tech Guys rose steadily and accounted for the highest sales during the period, peaking in 2005. In contrast, sales at Laptop Plus, which had the lowest sales of the three stores, decreased considerably while figures at Computer Plus fluctuated over the period. Standing at about 5, 000 in 2000, computer sales at The Tech Guys remained stable for the first year before increasing steadily to 8, 000 in 2003. Following this, there was a considerable rise until the end of the period when it reached a peak of 14, 000 units. Sales at Computer Plus grew significantly, from 4, 000 units to 10, 000, in the first 2 years of the period. The figure then fell dramatically to a low of about 3, 000 before rising substantially in the final year to finish at 6, 000 units. On the other hand, the number of computers sold at Laptop World began at about 8, 000, and dropped slightly in 2001 before remaining unchanged for the following 2 years. After witnessing another decrease in 2004, the figure levelled off and ended the period at 4, 000 units.
The line graph illustrates how
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computers
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from 2000 to 2005 at three computer shops located in Ho Chi Minh City.

Overall
, the
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at The Tech Guys rose
steadily
and accounted for the highest
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sales
during the
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period
, peaking in 2005.
In contrast
,
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at Laptop Plus, which had the lowest
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sales
of the three stores, decreased
considerably
while
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at Computer Plus fluctuated over the period.

Standing at about 5, 000 in 2000, computer
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sales
at The Tech Guys remained stable for the
first
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increasing
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to 8, 000 in 2003. Following this, there was a considerable rise until the
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end
of the
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when it reached a peak of 14, 000 units.
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at Computer Plus grew
significantly
, from 4, 000 units to 10, 000, in the
first
2 years of the
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period
. The
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then fell
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to a low of about 3, 000
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rising
substantially
in the final
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to finish at 6, 000 units.

On the other hand
, the number of computers sold at Laptop World began at about 8, 000, and dropped
slightly
in 2001
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remaining unchanged for the following 2 years. After witnessing another decrease in 2004, the
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levelled off and ended the
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at 4, 000 units.
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