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The bar graph illustrates the proportions of males and females who did a daily physical activity based on age factor in Australia in the year 2010.

The bar graph illustrates the proportions of males and females who did a daily physical activity based on age factor in Australia in the year 2010. Mqo0p
The bar graph illustrates the proportions of males and females who did a daily physical activity based on age factor in Australia in the year 2010. Overall, it can be seen that the percentage of the female group with 45 to 54 years of age involved in physical activity every day were highest and the male group with 35-44 years were the lowest. Coming to females, the 45-54-year-old were approximately 53 percent active followed by 55 to 64 and 35 to 44 adults with 53 and 525 percentages approximately. The old age women of more than 65 years were least active each day stood at about 47 percent. In the Male group, the younger men with 15-24 age accounted for 52. 8 which is highest among other male groups. The second most active were 65 and above group in men nearly 47. The men and women participated almost the same in the older group whereas there was a noticeable difference in the age group of 35-44 years which are about 53 and 40 percentages for men and women respectively.
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that the percentage of the female
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with 45 to 54 years of
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involved in physical activity every day were highest and the male
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with 35-44 years were the lowest.

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were approximately 53 percent active followed by 55 to 64 and 35 to 44 adults with 53 and 525 percentages approximately.

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women of more than 65 years were least active each day stood at about 47 percent.

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, the younger
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with 15-24
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accounted for 52. 8 which is highest among other male
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of 35-44 years which are about 53 and 40 percentages for
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