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The given diagram illustrates a method of producing ceramic pots

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The given diagram illustrates a method of producing ceramic pots. Overall, what is striking from the diagram is that there are different steps involved in the production line, starting with raw material and ending with finished goods. This process includes mixing material, shaping and then coloring. At the first stage in the production of ceramic pots, raw materials are collected and transported to the factory. All materials will be crushed to form a powder before going to the mixing step. Next, this mixture will be poured into moulds. After the drying time of about 4-6 hours, these moulds are opened and the pots are taken out. In this stage, all the pots are shaped exactly the same with each other. All the pots are placed in the oven to be baked at 1000 degree celcius. Finally, the pots are dipped in the colour and go though colour firing step. After all, the finished pots are ready for distribution.
The
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given
diagram illustrates a method of producing ceramic pots.

Overall
, what is striking from the diagram is that there are
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different
steps involved in the production line, starting with raw
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material
and ending with finished
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goods
. This process includes mixing
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material
, shaping and then coloring.

At the
first
stage in the production of ceramic
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pots
, raw
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materials
are collected
and transported to the factory. All
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materials
will
be crushed
to form a powder
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before
going to the mixing step.
Next
, this mixture will
be poured
into
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moulds
. After the drying time of about 4-6 hours, these
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moulds
are opened
and the
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pots
are taken
out. In this stage, all the
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pots
are shaped
exactly the same with each other.

All the
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pots
are placed
in the oven to
be baked
at 1000 degree
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celcius
.
Finally
, the
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pots
are dipped
in the
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colour
and go
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though
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colour
firing step.
After all
, the finished
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pots
are ready for distribution.
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IELTS academic The given diagram illustrates a method of producing ceramic pots

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  American English
4 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
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