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The bar graph illustrates the contributions to India's economy made by three categories

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The bar graph illustrates the contributions to India's economy made by three categories: agriculture, industry, and services from 1960 to 2000. Looking at the chart in more detail, agriculture declined its importance gradually every decade, meanwhile, a reverse pattern was observed in the service sector. In 1960, the percentage contribution of farming reached a peak of over 60%, which was about three times higher than that of the industrial and service sector. This figure lost its momentum and dropped steadily throughout 40 years and accounted for about 12% at the end of the survey. By contrast, the significance of services went up slightly over the first 20 years, at 23% and 27% in 1970 and 1980. Then, this figure rose dramatically to around 45% in 1990 and peaked at over 60% in 2000, which was as high as that of the agricultural sector in 1960. From 1960 to 1980, the contribution of industry to India's GDP increased modestly to about 25%, which was 8% and 4% higher than that of itself in 1960 and 1970 respectively. This proportion remained stable over the final 20 years of the survey.
The bar graph illustrates the contributions to India's economy made by three categories: agriculture, industry, and
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services
from 1960 to 2000.

Looking at the chart in more detail, agriculture declined its importance
gradually
every decade, meanwhile, a reverse pattern
was observed
in the
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service
sector.

In 1960, the percentage contribution of farming reached a peak of
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over
60%, which was about three times higher than that of the industrial and
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service
sector. This figure lost its momentum and dropped
steadily
throughout 40 years and accounted for about 12% at the
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end
of the survey.

By contrast, the significance of
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services
went up
slightly
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over
the
first
20 years, at 23% and 27% in 1970 and 1980. Then, this figure rose
dramatically
to around 45% in 1990 and peaked at
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over
60% in 2000, which was as high as that of the agricultural sector in 1960.

From 1960 to 1980, the contribution of industry to India's GDP increased
modestly
to about 25%, which was 8% and 4% higher than that of itself in 1960 and 1970
respectively
. This proportion remained stable
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the final 20 years of the survey.
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