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The bar graph illustrate the population growth in England and Wales and also show the information about birth and death rate in 1700 to 2000

The bar graph illustrate the population growth in England and Wales and also show the information about birth and death rate in 1700 to 2000 66BVj
We provided bar graph illustrate the data about the population growth in England and Wales. They show information about birth and death rate in 1700 to 2000. It is apparently seen that, the population growth in 1700, it was about approximately 9 million. After a period of some years, the slight increase was shown in 1800. It was nearly 15 million. Moving further, in England and Wales the population was suddenly climbed up in 1900, about 39 million. After a period, the population were raised in 2000. On the contrary, the birth rate of Britishers in England was about 9% in 1700 and death rate was low in same years. But in 1800, the birth of britishers was increased approximately 24%. The death rate was less than second one. Moreover in 1900 to 2000, there are slight increase or decrease shown that is less than 15%. Overall, the population of Britisher was increased year by year. On the other hand, the ratio of birth rate was a rapidly increased and death rate was decreased.
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growth in England and Wales. They
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birth
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in 1700 to 2000.

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growth in 1700, it was about approximately 9 million. After a period of
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years, the slight increase
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in 1800. It was
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, in England and Wales the
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was
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population
were raised
in 2000.

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, the
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birth
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rate
of Britishers in England was about 9% in 1700 and death
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rate
was low in same years.
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in 1800, the
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britishers
was increased
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was less than second one.
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in 1900 to 2000, there are slight increase or decrease shown
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less than 15%.

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, the
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population
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, the ratio of
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birth
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was a
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increased and death
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rate
was decreased
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IELTS academic The bar graph illustrate the population growth in England and Wales and also show the information about birth and death rate in 1700 to 2000

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