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The bar graph given information about variation in population of Asian elephants from 1994 to 2007

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The bar graph given in information about variation in population of Asian elephants from 1994 do 2007. Overall, maximum population of Asian elephants had in india, while least number of population in china. At the end of years 2007, population was drastically fall down. compare to starting year except to Cambodia. To begin with, in 1997, the majority of elephants were in india around 9900 and second highest was Myanmar, accouning to 5400. However, there was dramatically decreased in 2004, which was almost 7300 in India and 4700 in Myanmar. Beside this, in Vietnam and Laus the member of Asian elephants were identically same just above 1000 in both years. Furthermore, the population of Asian elephants in Malaysia was 1000 in 2004, which was three time higher in 1997. Likewise, in china population stay at almost 500 in 2004, which was double in 1997. Apart from this, Sai Lanka had 3000 elephants in 1997 and in 2004 accounted to 2700 and Thailand had approximately in 1997 (2900) and in 2004 (1200). Contary to this, Cambodia had least population of elephants in  1997 around 1100 and in 2004 higher at 1200.
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in Malaysia was 1000 in 2004, which was three time higher in 1997.
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stay at almost 500 in 2004, which was double in 1997. Apart from this,
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in 1997 and in 2004 accounted to 2700 and Thailand had approximately in 1997 (2900) and in 2004 (1200).
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1997 around 1100 and in 2004 higher at 1200.
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