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The bar chart reflects the percentage of Australian men and women in various age ranges who did sports in 2010.

The bar chart reflects the percentage of Australian men and women in various age ranges who did sports in 2010. o5M9g

The bar chart reflects the percentage of Australian men and women in various age ranges who did sports in 2010. Overall, males who involved in sports show decrease trend from 15 to 24 ages to 35 to 44 ages then the it changes to exact opposite and starts to increase until over 65 years old, by contrary, females side starts to increase between 15 and 24 ages till 45 to 54 ages after that it decreases over the rest of given age ranges. Males did sports percentage, was highest on 15 to 24 age group, with more than half of the total and was lowest on 35 to 44 age range, with roughly 40%. Fall trend can be seen from 15 to 24 ages to 35 to 44 ages, which is a bit more than 10%. After 35 to 44, the trend begins to rise until older than 65 ages. Females participated regularly in sports activities percentage, was greatest between 45 to 54 ages, with around 50% and was smallest on two different age ranges which are 15 to 24 and 65 and over. From 15 to 24, there is a climb trend until 45 to 54 afterwards, the trend starts to decline till over 65 ages.

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