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The bar graph displays the taste of vehicles among young people from Britain, USA, Germany and France.

The bar graph displays the taste of vehicles among young people from Britain, USA, Germany and France. Overall, car was the most voted vehicle in all four countries, while motorcycle and bicycle were different depending on the region. For example, In Germany, adolesences prefered motorcycle over bicycle, unlike in the USA. To begin, the preference of car was the highest in France, at the rate of over 70%, followed Great Britain and the USA with the same ratio of 60%. Conversely, in Germany, the favour for bicycle was higher, which cause the rate for car to be the lowest among the four. Moving on, majority of the countries voted for bicycle over motorcycle, with Germany at the highest at over 40% then preceeded by Britain at 30%, about 15% for France and laslty, USA at only 10%.
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, In Germany,
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adolesences
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motorcycle
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, unlike in the USA.

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, the preference of car was the highest in France, at the rate of
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70%, followed Great Britain and the USA with the same ratio of 60%.
Conversely
, in Germany, the
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for
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bicycle
was higher, which cause the rate for car to be the lowest among the four.

Moving on,
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majority of
the countries voted for
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bicycle
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motorcycle, with Germany at the highest at
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over
40% then
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by Britain at 30%, about 15% for France and
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laslty
, USA at
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IELTS academic The bar graph displays the taste of vehicles among young people from Britain, USA, Germany and France.

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137 words
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