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The bar graph describes the literacy percentage of Indian people based on the gender and their location for the year 2013, 2015 and 2017.

The bar graph describes the literacy percentage of Indian people based on the gender and their location for the year 2013, 2015 and 2017. eebDV
The bar graph describes the literacy percentage of Indian people based on the gender and their location for the year 2013, 2015 and 2017. It is clear form the graph that literacy among men was higher overall and people living in Urban areas contributes more to the number than people in Rural areas. The rate has rose steadily for both urban and rural for the above years. The literacy level for urban men was significantly higher than men living in country-sides. The level has rose sharply from 57% to 78% for rural region, whereas the growth is steady for city side going slowly from 81% to 88, 76%. For the female population in rural region the literacy level were considerably lower as compared to the urban population. The rate for rural region has gone up dramatically from 30% to 57%. On the other hand, the number for literacy for urban females rose exponentially and slowly starting from 64% to around 80%.
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percentage of Indian
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people
based on the gender and their location for the year 2013, 2015 and 2017.

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clear
form the graph that
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literacy
among
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men
was higher
overall
and
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people
living in
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Urban
areas contributes more to the number than
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people
in
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Rural
areas. The rate has
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rose
steadily
for both
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urban
and
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rural
for the above years.

The
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literacy
level for
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urban
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men
was
significantly
higher than
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men
living in country-sides.
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The
level has
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rose
sharply
from 57% to 78% for
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rural
region, whereas the growth is steady for city side going
slowly
from 81% to 88, 76%.

For the female population in
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rural
region the
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literacy
level were
considerably
lower
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as
compared to the
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urban
population. The rate for
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rural
region has gone up
dramatically
from 30% to 57%.
On the other hand
, the number for
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literacy
for
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urban
females rose
exponentially
and
slowly
starting from 64% to around 80%.

IELTS academic The bar graph describes the literacy percentage of Indian people based on the gender and their location for the year 2013, 2015 and 2017.

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