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the bar graph below shows the quality of petrolium purchased by various countries in four diffrent year.

the bar graph below shows the quality of petrolium purchased by various countries in four diffrent year. 2568b
The bar graph depict the purchased petroleum by four country (Malaysia, Thailand, Indonesia, japan) from 2000 to 2015. The petrol is measure in million gallons. Overall, the highest purchased by the japan, followed by the second highest was Indonesia while Thailand was the least in purchase of petroleum. At the one end, in the year of the 2015 japan purchased the biggest amount of the petrol which was 50 million galleons. However, in 2010, it was decreased by 10 million gallons. Both the Malaysia and Thailand acquired equal amount in year of 2000, 2005 and 2010 which was around 15 million gallons. Japan was the only country where the demand of the petroleum was rose in every given period of time. At the other hand, the least and uniform amount of petroleum was picked up by the Thailand in the year of 2005 and 2010. Indonesia had fluctuation of high and low million gallons petroleum in each of given year.
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by four country (Malaysia, Thailand, Indonesia,
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japan)
from 2000 to 2015. The petrol is measure in
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million
gallons.

Overall
, the highest
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by the
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japan
, followed by the second highest was Indonesia while Thailand was the least in
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purchase
of petroleum.

At the one
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, in the
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year
of the 2015
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japan
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purchased
the biggest amount of the petrol which was 50
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million
galleons.
However
, in 2010, it
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by 10
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million
gallons. Both the Malaysia and Thailand acquired equal amount in
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year
of 2000, 2005 and 2010 which was around 15
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million
gallons.
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Japan
was the
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only
country where the demand of the
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petroleum
was rose in every
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given
period of time.

At the other hand, the least and uniform amount of
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petroleum
was picked
up by the Thailand in the
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year
of 2005 and 2010. Indonesia had fluctuation of high and low
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gallons
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petroleum
in each of
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year
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IELTS academic the bar graph below shows the quality of petrolium purchased by various countries in four diffrent year.

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