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The bar chat illustrates the numbers of children divided by gender who played six different types of sport in a town in England in 2012. v.2

The bar chat illustrates the numbers of children divided by gender who played six different types of sport in a town in England in 2012. v. 2
The bar chat illustrates the numbers of children divided by gender who played six different types of sport in a town in England in 2012. Overall, there were more boys who practiced sport than girls. In particular, the most popular game among boys was football, followed by tennis while girls preferred swimming to any other sport. On the other hand hockey was the least favorite kind of sport with both boys and girls. Boys outnumbered girls in football, tennis, cycling and hockey. For instance, there were three times as many boys (60) as girls(20) who played football and almost twice as many boys(38) as girls(20) who did cycling and played hockey. With regard to tennis, the difference in the numbers of boys and girls playing tennis was not so considerable. Swimming and badminton were the most popular sports among girls who exceeded boys by about 20% and 25% respectively.
The bar chat illustrates the numbers of children divided by gender
who
played six
different
types of
sport
in a town in England in 2012.

Overall
, there were more
boys
who
practiced
sport
than
girls
.
In particular
, the most popular game among
boys
was football, followed by tennis while
girls
preferred swimming to any other
sport
.
On the other hand
hockey was the least favorite kind of
sport
with both
boys
and girls.

Boys outnumbered
girls
in football, tennis, cycling and hockey.
For instance
, there were three times as
many
boys
(60) as
girls(20)
who
played football and almost twice as
many
boys(38)
as
girls(20)
who
did cycling
and played hockey. With regard to tennis, the difference in the numbers of
boys
and
girls
playing tennis was not
so
considerable.

Swimming and badminton were the most popular
sports
among
girls
who
exceeded
boys
by about 20% and 25%
respectively
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar chat illustrates the numbers of children divided by gender who played six different types of sport in a town in England in 2012. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
149 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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