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The bar charts provide information on the percentage of male and female volunteers who participated in various activities in one US city in 2015.

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The bar charts provide information on the percentage of male and female volunteers who participated in various activities in one US city in 2015. Overall, while the participation of men was more than women, most of activities were carried out more by female members over the period in question. Looking at the details, as regards age range the lowest percentage of volunteers was between 25 and 34 aged male and female members with 3 percent and around 4 percent, respectively. The highest percentage was among 67-74 aged people in both sex (8% and 10%). The participation rates of men were similar from 45 to 64 age range with 8%, whereas there was a noticeable growth in female members’ percentages between 45-54 and 55-64 with around 5% and under 6%, in turn. The rates of 15-24 age range in both men and women were 4% and approximately 5%, correspondingly. Finally, if we look at 34-44 aged volunteers, the percentage was around 5% for female and 7% for male. In terms of activities carried out by volunteers, in teaching, attending meetings and training session and building and outdoor work were done more by women than men. The rest of activities such as food preparation and organizing and preparing were carried out more by males than females ranging from 10%-14% to 5%-11%, respectively.
The bar charts provide information on the
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of male and
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female
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volunteers
who participated in various
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activities
in one US city in 2015.

Overall
, while the participation of
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men
was more than women, most of
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activities
were carried
out more by
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female
members over the period in question.

Looking at the
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details
, as regards age range the lowest
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percentage
of
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volunteers
was between 25 and 34 aged male and
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female
members with 3 percent and around 4 percent,
respectively
. The highest
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was among 67-74 aged
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people
in both sex (8% and 10%). The participation rates of
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men
were similar from 45 to 64 age range with 8%, whereas there was a noticeable growth in
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female
members’
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percentages
between 45-54 and 55-64 with around 5% and under 6%, in turn.
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The
rates of 15-24 age range in both
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men
and women were 4% and approximately 5%,
correspondingly
.
Finally
, if we look at 34-44 aged
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volunteers
, the
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was around 5% for
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female
and 7% for male.

In terms of
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activities
carried out by
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, in teaching, attending meetings and training session and building and outdoor work
were done
more by women than
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men
. The rest of
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activities
such as food preparation and organizing and preparing
were carried
out more by males than
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females
ranging from 10%-14% to 5%-11%,
respectively
.
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