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The bar chart shows the percentages of UK labor workforce in five industries between 1841 and 2011. Describe the bar chart

The bar chart shows the percentages of UK labor workforce in five industries between 1841 and 2011. Describe the bar chart 3b975
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Britain's labor force in five main industrial sectors between 1841 and 2011. Overall, all industries have a significant change in employment during the period of 70 years, especially in Manufacturing, Services and Agriculture/Fishing. Looking at the details, manufacturing and services were two main sectors in the proportion of the UK workforce, accounting for around 33% in 1841. There was a dramatic rise in the services sector, increasing 48% to peak at 81% in 2011. Although manufacturing decreased significantly 25% in 2011 from 36% in 1841, it was still one of the highest sectors in the UK workforce. Agriculture/ fishing also declined sharply to hit the lowest point at 1% in 2011. Compared with the big change of manufacturing, services and agriculture/ fishing, construction and energy/ water had a slight transition and they still kept the small percentage in the labor force from 1841 to 2011. Construction grew steadily by 3% in 2021 while energy/ water went down minimally by 2% to peak to the lowest point at 1% in 2011.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Britain's labor force in five main industrial
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sectors
between 1841 and 2011.
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in employment during the period of 70 years,
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Manufacturing
,
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Services
and Agriculture/Fishing.

Looking at the
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,
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manufacturing
and
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services
were two main
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in the proportion of the UK workforce, accounting for around 33% in 1841. There was a dramatic rise in the
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services
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sector
, increasing 48% to peak at 81% in 2011. Although
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manufacturing
decreased
significantly
25% in 2011 from 36% in 1841, it was
still
one of the highest
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sectors
in the UK workforce. Agriculture/ fishing
also
declined
sharply
to hit the lowest point at 1% in 2011.

Compared with the
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big
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change
of
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manufacturing
,
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services
and agriculture/ fishing, construction and energy/ water had a slight
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transition and
they
still
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percentage in the labor force from 1841 to 2011. Construction grew
steadily
by 3% in 2021 while energy/ water went down
minimally
by 2% to peak to the lowest point at 1% in 2011.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the percentages of UK labor workforce in five industries between 1841 and 2011. Describe the bar chart

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