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The bar chart shows the % of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.

The bar chart shows the % of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. 8DGw
The bar graph illustrates the percentage of the total world population in India, China, USA and Japan in the year 1950, 2002 and projections for 2050. In general, china contributed the most in population while Japan has least significant proportion in the time period of 150 Years. The china has highest percentage in the beginning of the year that is nearly 25% then it slightly decrease and expected to reach 15% in the end of the year. It can also be seen that USA has experienced downward trend but it is expected to remain steady in future where as the rate of population in Japan has dropped below 5% in the ending period of the year. However, India has increased gradually just above 15% in 2002 and the graph also represents that in future the rate of population in India will reach nearly 20% in 2050.
The bar graph illustrates the percentage of the total world
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population
in India, China, USA and Japan in the
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year
1950, 2002 and projections for 2050.
In general
, china contributed the most in
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population
while Japan has
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least
significant proportion in the time period of 150 Years. The china has
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highest
percentage in the beginning of the
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year
that is
nearly
25% then it
slightly
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decrease
and
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expected
to reach 15% in the
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end
of the
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year
. It can
also
be
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seen
that USA has experienced downward trend
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but
it is
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expected
to remain steady in future
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where as
the rate of
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population
in Japan has dropped below 5% in the ending period of the
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year
.
However
, India has increased
gradually
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just
above 15% in 2002 and the graph
also
represents that in future the rate of
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in India will reach
nearly
20% in 2050.

IELTS academic The bar chart shows the % of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.

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