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The charts show the amount and quality of water supplied to two regions of the world.

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The first-given bar charts elucidate the information about how much water is supplied to Australia and South East Asia, while another bar chart illustrate the information in terms of the degree of its water cleanliness. Overall, at first glance it is evident that the amount of water supplied in both regions witnessed an upward trend over the 20-year period between 1990 and 2010, whereas the degree of its cleanliness declined. Regarding the first chart, the percentage of stockpiled water in Australia experienced a notable growth from 80% to just under 100% during the period. Likewise, even though the quantity of water supplied in South East Asia was less than that in Australia, it significantly increased from 40% (1990) to just under 80% (2010). Turning to the second chart, it can be seen that the degree of water cleanliness in both Australia and South Asia. While the former has a slight decrease from approximately 70% to just above 80% within the time frame, the latter shown a slight-downward trend from 40% to around 38%.
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bar
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elucidate the information about how much
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is supplied
to Australia and South East Asia, while another bar
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chart
illustrate the information in terms of the degree of its
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cleanliness.

Overall
, at
first
glance it is evident that the amount of
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water
supplied in both regions witnessed an upward trend over the 20-year period between 1990 and 2010, whereas the degree of its cleanliness declined.

Regarding the
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, the percentage of stockpiled
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in Australia experienced a notable growth from 80% to
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just
under 100% during the period.
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,
even though
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supplied in South East Asia was less than that in Australia, it
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increased from 40% (1990) to
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just
under 80% (2010).

Turning to the second
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chart
, it can be
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that the degree of
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cleanliness in both Australia and South Asia. While the former has a slight decrease from approximately 70% to
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above 80% within the time frame, the latter shown a slight-downward trend from 40% to around 38%.
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IELTS academic The charts show the amount and quality of water supplied to two regions of the world.

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