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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to four London museums.

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The bar chart elucidates how many people visited four different museums in the UK from June to December in a typical year. At a cursory glance, it is clear that while the British Museum was the most popular, the National museum was least preferred. At the same time, museums were hugely visited in the month of August compared to other months. As mentioned, the highest number of people visited British museum and the figure was approximately 710000 people in August, while History museum stood at second place with exactly 60000 visitors. In September, the rate was declined to just under 400000 and 60000 for British and History museum respectively. However, the science Museum was reached in the second position in September with 500000 In June and July, although History, british and science museum had around 400000 visitors, the National was visited by 200000 and the figure was fairly stable throughout the given time frame.
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in the UK from June to December in a typical year.

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that while the British
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was the most popular, the National
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was least preferred. At the same time,
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in the month of August compared to other months.

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British
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and the figure was approximately 710000
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in August, while History
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stood at second place with exactly 60000 visitors. In September, the rate
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under 400000 and 60000 for British and History
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respectively
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was reached
in the second position in September with 500000

In June and July, although History,
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and science
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had around 400000 visitors, the National was
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by 200000 and the figure was
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