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THE BAR CHART SHOWS PERCENTAGE OF ELDERLY PEOPLE IN 1980, 2000 and 2030,summarise the information and make comparison where relevant

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The graph details the percentage of elderly people in Canada, Germany and the UK. In the past with projections for the future. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that elderly populations have risen and are predicted to continue to grow steadily in all countries. Germany has and will continue to have the highest proportion, while Canada will likely overtake the UK. In 1980, Germany had the greatest percentage of elderly art 15%, slightly above the UK and 5% higher than Canada. By 2000, percentages for Germany and Canada both surged by 5% (to 20%and 15%, respectively), compared to the UK which rose marginally to equal with Canada. By 2030, Germany is expected to rise by another 5% to 25%, with Canada surpassing the United Kingtom and finishes at 22%and the latters figures lagging behind slightly at just under 20%
The graph
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the percentage of elderly
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people
in Canada, Germany and the UK. In the past with projections for the future. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that elderly populations have risen and
are predicted
to continue to grow
steadily
in all countries. Germany has and will continue to have the highest proportion, while Canada will likely overtake the UK.

In 1980, Germany had the greatest percentage of elderly art 15%,
slightly
above the UK and 5% higher than Canada. By 2000, percentages for Germany and Canada both surged by 5% (to 20%and 15%,
respectively
), compared to the UK which rose
marginally
to equal with Canada.

By 2030, Germany is
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expected
to rise by another 5% to 25%, with Canada surpassing the United
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Kingtom
and finishes at 22%and the
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latters
figures lagging behind
slightly
at
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under 20%
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