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The bar chart presents the amount of UK travelers visiting either Thailand or Greece over a four year period.

The bar chart presents the amount of UK travelers visiting either Thailand or Greece over a four year period. wnK53
The bar chart presents the amount of UK travelers visiting either Thailand or Greece over a four year period. Overall, both countries saw drops and increases in tourism over time. Although Thailand saw an initial downturn, visiting travelers rose year on year thereafter. Greece saw big fluctuations in the numbers of people arriving in their country throughout the period. The total numbers of UK tourists visiting Thailand in 2010 stood at 3. 5 million, considerably higher than Greece at that time. However, in the following year, this number dropped by around 500, 000 people, which was lower than Greece’s figure that same year. From here on, the figure gradually rose by 500, 000 visits per year, resulting in a final total of 4, 000, 000 people visiting Thailand in 2013. This was also the highest amount of yearly visits in the four year span. Greece’s total number of visits made to the country fluctuated largely throughout the four years. Beginning in 2010, the total amount of visits by UK travellers stood at 2. 5 million. This rocketed to slightly under 4. 5 million in 2011. Then in the following year, this figure more than halved, to around 1. 8 million. Finally by 2013, the total amount of UK tourists visiting Greece increased to 3 million tourists, a million below the total number of visits in Thailand.
The bar chart presents the
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of UK travelers visiting either Thailand or Greece over a four
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period.

Overall
, both countries
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drops and increases in tourism over time. Although Thailand
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an initial downturn, visiting travelers rose
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on
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thereafter. Greece
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big
fluctuations in the
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of
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people
arriving in their country throughout the period.

The
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of UK tourists visiting Thailand in 2010 stood at 3. 5
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million
,
considerably
higher than Greece at that time.
However
, in the following
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, this
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dropped by around 500, 000
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people
, which was lower than Greece’s figure that same
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year
. From here on, the figure
gradually
rose by 500, 000
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visits
per
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year
, resulting in a final
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total
of 4, 000, 000
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people
visiting Thailand in 2013. This was
also
the highest
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of yearly
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visits
in the four
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span.

Greece’s
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of
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visits
made to the country fluctuated
largely
throughout the four years. Beginning in 2010, the
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of
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visits
by UK
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travellers
stood at 2. 5
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. This rocketed to
slightly
under 4. 5
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in 2011. Then in the following
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, this figure more than halved, to around 1. 8
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.
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Finally
by 2013, the
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of UK tourists visiting Greece increased to 3
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tourists, a
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million
below the
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total
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number
of
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visits
in Thailand.
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IELTS academic The bar chart presents the amount of UK travelers visiting either Thailand or Greece over a four year period.

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