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The chart represents changes in the occupation rates of female and male members in three different countries, namely Canada, South Korea, and Sweden between 2005 and 2015. Overall, it can be seen that there were major falls in work rates in all countries, although some countries in the region have much higher employment rates than others. By the year 2005, the figures had reached over 75% in Sweden, which registered similar rates to South Korea at under 5% per male. In Canada, the proportion of male employees rose to around 70% of the population. In comparison with men, woman of the same time had lower success rates. From 2005 to 2015, there was an increase in the numbers of females than of males. The most notable changes were in two nations, which already had lower rates of female employment at the beginning of the ten-year period, Canada and Sweden. The figures for Canada and Sweden were higher, more than two fifths respectively. The trend goes up over the past ten years. According to the data, South Korea and Canada had a very large majority rate of male employment in 2015. It plummeted to its highest point with just over 70%.

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