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The given horizontal bar graph illustrates The upmost eight Online activities done by adults of country Slovakia during the month of July. The given data is calculated in ratio or proportion. From an overall perspective, it is manifest that during the month of July, the percentage of males using email activity was maximum while the proportion of both males and females doing job hunting activity was minimum. Meticulously observing the line graph, it is seen that the total internet Users of activity online education of females was nearly 27% While the proportion of males was about 28% Which was slightly more than the percentage of females. Whereas, the proportion of males and females who were doing health research activity was 61% and 33% Respectively. In addition, the percentage of males and females who what doing job hunting Asim, which was 21% Of both the genders while the proportion of females who were doing seeming videos music activities was 48% And ratio of males was nearly 53% Doing the same activity. Further strengthening The same point of view, it is clear that the percentage of females uses of internet Banking was 73% While the ratio of male uses who What doing same activity was about 78% whereas, The ratio of females and males who were doing social networking activities was 68% and 79% Respectively. Further more, the proportion of females and males who was doing text or instant messaging was 83% and 84% respectively While activity of using email was done mostly why mails which was nearly 88% and leastly by Females who is percentage was 82%.
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percentage
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males
using email
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was maximum while the
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proportion
of both
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and
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females
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doing
job hunting
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was minimum.

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observing the line graph, it is
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seen
that the total internet Users of
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online education of
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females
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nearly
27% While the
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proportion
of
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males
was about 28% Which was
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females
. Whereas, the
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proportion
of
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males
and
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females
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were
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health research
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was 61% and 33%
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.
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, which was 21% Of both the genders while the
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were
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seeming videos music
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activities
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uses
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text or instant messaging was 83% and 84%
respectively
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