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The bar chart indicates the value of export earnings in billion scale of unit for 5 categories and the table shows the percentage change in values of each categories from 2015 to 2016

The bar chart indicates the value of export earnings in billion scale of unit for 5 categories and the table shows the percentage change in values of each categories from 2015 to 2016 Myb0Q
The bar chart indicates the value of export earnings in billion scale of unit for 5 categories and the table shows the percentage change in values of each categories from 2015 to 2016. Petroleum products and engineered goods started strong in 2015 reaching for more than $50 billions and increasing throughout 2016, while other 3 categories were falling behind below $50 billions in 2015 and did not manage to increase their growth within a year. As for Gems and jewellery, it earns around $42 billions in 2015 and did not manage to increase its earning by 2016. Therefore, this category was the only one that has a significant drop of percentage change in values within the year. On the contrary, even though textiles has the lowest earnings during 2015 and 2016, this categories managed to have the highest percentage growth for the earnings, reaching 15. 24% which exceeds the other 2 bigger categories such as petroleum products and engineered goods.
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from 2015 to 2016. Petroleum products and engineered
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were falling behind below $50
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in 2015 and did not manage to increase their growth within a year. As for Gems and
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in 2015 and did not manage to increase its
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by 2016.
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during 2015 and 2016,
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managed to have the highest percentage growth for the
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IELTS academic The bar chart indicates the value of export earnings in billion scale of unit for 5 categories and the table shows the percentage change in values of each categories from 2015 to 2016

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