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The bar chart illustrates there are four different age groups suffered from the most crucial reasons of stress in Canada.

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The bar chart illustrates there are four different age groups suffered from the most crucial reasons of stress in Canada. Looking at the chart, it is clear that people in their 70's and over were under pressure because of their own health matters and without any specific reasons. In addition, due the overload put pressure on the 25-54 age group. For people age from 65 to 74 and 75 or older were still stressed albeit without any causes, which took up 32% and 35% respectively. Moreover, the problems about finance was less than half than an overload of stress in people falling into the 40 to 49 age group, at 10%. On the contrary, 10% or less was the the percentage of those age 65-74 and 75 and above at the same two tensions. Interestingly, the allocation the elderly people in the 75s was twice greater than people who were between 55 and 64 years olad. This figure followed by health issuse. Nevertheless, the smallest minority which made up 4% for the 25-54. We can see that for each age group would have a number of factors having influence on themselves.
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