Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Computer Ownership 2001-2010

Computer Ownership 2001-2010 pay9m
The given bar graphs show data on the percentage of computer ownership from the year 2002 to 2010 both by comparison of total population and education level. As is observed from the given graphs, the computer ownership increased over the years and this ownership among the people with higher studies was higher than others. According to the first graph, more than 50% people owned computers in 2002 and this percentage kept on increasing over years. After 6 years this percentage reached to over 60% and finally in 2010 the percentage of people who owned computers reached to over 70%. From the second bar graph, we can observe that the percentage of computer ownership increased with the education level; i. e. the higher the education level the higher the percentage of computer ownership. For instance, 15% of the people who had High school graduation owned computers in 2002 and this percentage were about 60 for Bachelor degree holders and over 80 for the postgraduate degree holders. After 8 years, in 2010, the same trend could be observed and the percentage of people who owned computers increased significantly compared to 2002.
The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
bar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graphs
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
data on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ownership
from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
2002 to 2010 both by comparison of total population and education level. As
is observed
from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graphs
, the computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ownership
increased
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
the years and this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ownership
among the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
with higher studies was higher than others.

According to the
first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graph
, more than 50%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
owned
computers in 2002 and this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
on increasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
years. After 6 years this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
reached to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
60% and
finally
in 2010 the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
owned
computers reached to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
70%.

From the second bar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graph
, we can observe that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ownership
increased with the education level;
There should be no space here: "i.e.".
i. e.
the higher the education level the higher the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ownership
.
For instance
, 15% of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who had High school graduation
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
owned
computers in 2002 and this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
were about 60 for Bachelor degree holders and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
80 for the postgraduate degree holders. After 8 years, in 2010, the same trend could
be observed
and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
owned
computers increased
significantly
compared to 2002.

IELTS academic Computer Ownership 2001-2010

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
189 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • The diagram illustrates the process steps involved in production of carbonated drinks from scratch.
    The diagram illustrates the process steps involved in production of carbonated drinks from scratch. Overall, the process takes place in five major steps starting with cleansing of water to packaging of the final product. The making starts with purification of water, where the raw water is passed t...
  • The graph below plots rail industry revenues and subsidies from 1989-90 to 2009-10.
    The graph illustrates the percentage of government support from the total revenue in the rail industry from year 1989-90 to 2009-10. Whereas, the cost of revenue is according to year 2009-10. Overall, the total cost of revenue as well as the government support was high in year 2006-07. Whereas, it ...
  • The diagram illustrates the process of dough for a pizza.
    The picture illustrates how the pizza dough was made from scratch. Overall, the process involves 4 main steps. Initially, the baker has to measure out all of the ingredients, which consist of 4 cups of flour, one and a half cups of water, two teaspoons of salt, and one and a half teaspoons of yeast...
  • the given graph shows water supply
    As we know water is very essentile thing for daily life. The given charts indicate the information about the amount of water quality which supplied to two regions all the world. we will summarise the information and we will find the key feacture. To begine with, water supply is the most important t...
  • The bar chart shows the daily meat consumption by region in 1961 and 2013.
    The bar chart shows the amount of meat consumed by some different regions every day in 1961, in comparison with the data in 2013. Overall, the daily meat consumption of all regions increased in 2013 compared to 1961. It is witnessed that North America, Europe, South America and Asia have significan...
  • the graph show the proportion of three nutrients in three diffrent diets.
    The given pie charts compare the distribution in the data on intake of three nutrients in various diets including healthy diet for sport, healthy diet and average diet. From an overall perspective, it is evident that carbohydrates consumption accounted for the relatively large proportion in total d...





Get more results for topic:
  • Computer Ownership 2001-2010