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The bar chart illustrates the rate of males and females in different age groups living individually while the number of bedrooms in these Single-occupant houses can (could?) be seen in the par chart during 2011.

The bar chart illustrates the rate of males and females in different age groups living individually while the number of bedrooms in these Single-occupant houses can (could? ) be seen in the par chart during 2011. kxbnO
The bar chart illustrates the rate of males and females in different age groups living individually while the number of bedrooms in these Single-occupant houses can (could? ) be seen in the par chart during 2011. Overall, the percentage of females was greater than that of males in people aged 65 and over whereas the opposite was true for people who were under 50 years old. Meanwhile, those kinds of households with no more than 3 bedrooms were the most popular categories in single-occupant households. Looking at the detail in the bar chart, as the whole in all ages living alone, females made of 55% which was quite higher than that of males (45%). The same percentage between males and females were recorded in people aged 50-64 (50%). In the age groups of 16-49, the proportion of males was greater than that of females as opposed to people in the remaining age groups (65 and over), accounting for under 40%. Moving into the pie chart, in an individual-family house, the most favorite room was 2 bedrooms occupying 35, 4%. The quantities of 3 bedrooms and 1 bedroom were lower, constituting 29, 8% and 28% respectively. Merely 5, 3% of rooms was 4 bedrooms compared a tiny percentage of 5 and more bedrooms (1. 4%)
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during 2011.

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, the percentage of
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females
was greater than that of
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in
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people
aged 65 and over whereas the opposite was true for
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who were under 50 years
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. Meanwhile, those kinds of households with no more than 3
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bedrooms
were the most popular categories in single-occupant households.

Looking at the detail in the bar
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, as the whole in all
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ages
living alone,
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females
made of 55% which was quite higher than that of
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males
(45%).

The same percentage between
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males
and
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females
were recorded
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people
aged 50-64 (50%). In the
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groups of 16-49, the proportion of
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males
was greater than that of
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in the remaining
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groups (65 and over), accounting for under 40%.

Moving into the pie
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, in an individual-family
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, the most favorite room was 2
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occupying 35, 4%. The quantities of 3
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bedrooms
and 1
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bedroom
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lower, constituting 29, 8% and 28%
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compared a tiny percentage of 5 and more
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(1. 4%)
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the rate of males and females in different age groups living individually while the number of bedrooms in these Single-occupant houses can (could? ) be seen in the par chart during 2011.

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