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The line graph describes the amount of renewable energy constituting the total fuel between 1971 and 2006.

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The line graph describes the amount of renewable energy constituting the total fuel between 1971 and 2006. Overall, among 5 countries that witnessed an upward trend in the usage of energy, the most striking change was recorded in the United States. While Finland had the consistently highest proportion of energy consumed, the UK’s usage of sustainable energy was insubstantial. In the period from 1971 to 2003, the percentage of fuel used in Finland saw significant fluctuations and then rose back to nearly the starting point at the end of the period. The percentage of inexhaustible energy consumed in Finland began at about 24%, after which it fluctuated before increasing from approximately 18% to 23%. An exact 15% of the total energy was used in Denmark at first; however, this figure fluctuated dramatically between the year 1981 and 1992 then climbed gradually to over 15% in the final year. Fluctuations of energy in the US happened at first the amount of fuel used afterward rocketed from about 6% to nearly 20%. About 8% of the sustainable energy was consumed in France in 1971, with a subsequent fluctuation and a final steady increase from 1991 onwards. Both Germany and the UK saw a comparable trend to France but to a lesser extent, their percentages rose from approximately 5% and 2% to 13% and 7% respectively.
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the amount of renewable
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constituting the total fuel between 1971 and 2006.

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, among 5 countries that witnessed an upward trend in the usage of
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energy
, the most striking
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change
was recorded
in the United States. While Finland had the
consistently
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highest
proportion of
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energy
consumed, the UK’s usage of sustainable
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energy
was insubstantial. In the period from 1971 to 2003, the percentage of fuel
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used
in Finland
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saw
significant fluctuations and then rose back to
nearly
the starting point at the
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end
of the period.

The percentage of inexhaustible
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energy
consumed in Finland began at about 24%, after which it fluctuated
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before
increasing from approximately 18% to 23%. An exact 15% of the total
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energy
was
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used
in Denmark at
first
;
however
, this figure fluctuated
dramatically
between the year 1981 and 1992 then climbed
gradually
to over 15% in the final year. Fluctuations of
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energy
in the US happened at
first
the amount of fuel
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used
afterward rocketed from about 6% to
nearly
20%.

About 8% of the sustainable
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energy
was consumed
in France in 1971, with a subsequent fluctuation and a final steady increase from 1991 onwards. Both Germany and the UK
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saw
a comparable trend to France
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but
to a lesser extent, their percentages rose from approximately 5% and 2% to 13% and 7%
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The line graph describes the amount of renewable energy constituting the total fuel between 1971 and 2006.

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