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The table compares the proportions of people using 7 different features of their mobile phones in three separate years (2006, 2008, and 2010).

The table compares the proportions of people using 7 different features of their mobile phones in three separate years (2006, 2008, and 2010). Qlwry
The table compares the proportions of people using 7 different features of their mobile phones in three separate years (2006, 2008, and 2010). Overall, cell phone owners used their phones mostly to make calls. It is also noticeable only that the rate of cell phone owners using the calling function fell over the period shown. From 2006 to 2010, a slight fall of 1% was seen in the percentage of owners who made calls on their mobiles. By contrast, the figures for users taking photos and sending & receiving text messages rose gradually to 76% and 79% respectively. Also, the period between 2008 and 2010 witnessed a significant climb by 32% in the proportion of people using their phones to search the Internet. Turning to the other 3 handset features, it can be seen that they are not as popular as the 4 features mentioned above. To be specific, the proportion of people who used the music play function on their cellular phones went up significantly by 14% in 2010. Likewise, the percentage of cell phone owners using their phones to record video increased almost fourfold to 35% at the end of the period. Meanwhile, the figure for users playing games rose from 17% in 2006 to 42% in 2008, then fell slightly to 41% in the final year.
The table compares the proportions of
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people
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different
features of their mobile
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phones
in three separate years (2006, 2008, and 2010).

Overall
, cell
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phone
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owners
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used
their
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phones
mostly
to
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make
calls. It is
also
noticeable
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only
that the rate of cell
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phone
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owners
using the calling function fell over the period shown.

From 2006 to 2010, a slight fall of 1% was
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seen
in the percentage of
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owners
who made calls on their mobiles. By contrast, the figures for users taking photos and sending & receiving text messages rose
gradually
to 76% and 79%
respectively
.
Also
, the period between 2008 and 2010 witnessed a significant climb by 32% in the proportion of
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people
using their
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phones
to search the Internet.

Turning to the other 3 handset features, it can be
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seen
that they are not as popular as the 4 features mentioned above. To be specific, the proportion of
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people
who
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used
the music play function on their cellular
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phones
went up
significantly
by 14% in 2010.
Likewise
, the percentage of cell
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phone
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owners
using their
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phones
to record video increased almost fourfold to 35% at the
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end
of the period. Meanwhile, the figure for users playing games rose from 17% in 2006 to 42% in 2008, then fell
slightly
to 41% in the final year.
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IELTS academic The table compares the proportions of people using 7 different features of their mobile phones in three separate years (2006, 2008, and 2010).

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