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It can be seen that the percentage of females living alone was higher than that of males and the gap between these figures was wider in the older age groups.On the other hand, most single households had two bedrooms.

It can be seen that the percentage of females living alone was higher than that of males and the gap between these figures was wider in the older age groups. On the other hand, most single households had two bedrooms. d3rMd
The bar chart compares the proportions of men and women who lived alone according to people’s age in England in the year 2011 and the pie chart gives information about how many bedrooms in one-occupant households. It can be seen that the percentage of females living alone was higher than that of males and the gap between these figures was wider in the older age groups. On the other hand, most single households had two bedrooms. In the groups of people under 50 years old, males accounted for a larger proportion of single occupants than females but they made up the same percentage in the age group 50-64, with 50 percent for each. In contrast, among the older groups, the figures for women were higher, distributing 76% of the people aged 85 or more. In the year 2011, 35. 4% of one-person households had two bedrooms, while the percentage of three-bedroom and one-bedroom was little lower, just under 30% and 28% of the total respectively. Only around 7% of single-occupant homes had four or more bedrooms.
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bedrooms in one-occupant households.

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that the percentage of females living alone was higher than that of males and the gap between these figures was wider in the older age
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under 50 years
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, males accounted for a larger proportion of single occupants than females
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they made up the same percentage in the age
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50-64, with 50 percent for each.
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, the figures for women were higher, distributing 76% of the
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aged 85 or more.

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IELTS academic It can be seen that the percentage of females living alone was higher than that of males and the gap between these figures was wider in the older age groups. On the other hand, most single households had two bedrooms.

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